Interview with M. King

M. King is a colleague of Max Griffin who also publishes with loveyoudivine. Like Max, she writes across a wide number of genres, and often includes GLBT characters in her fiction. In addition to her fiction, she has contributed poetry, reviews, and columns to print and online publications. You can find more about her at her website. Max did this interview in a sequence of emails starting on November 10, 2009.

M. Griffin: Hi. It's nice to get started on this. Since we're on the other side of the pond from one another, this will doubtless be a bit of a slow process. For starters, can you tell me what authors influence and inspire you?

M. King: Thanks! And nice to 'meet' you, by the way. I've always read pretty widely, and I write across a lot of different genres and styles, so I suppose my influences are rather varied.

My love of imagery probably comes from the amount of poetry I grew up absorbing, and a long-time love of folklore. I'm fascinated by different languages, different cultures--different experiences in all forms, really--as well as the actual mechanics of writing and the written word. I love John Steinbeck's elegant sparseness of style, but I'm also very drawn to the richness of writers like Felice Picano and Djuna Barnes. I also have a huge soft spot for Terry Pratchett, which might be something to do with the English sense of humour, and if I ever accomplish a fraction of the complexity of vision he's managed in his Discworld novels, I'll be happy.

As far as inspiration goes, I take a great deal more from individual books--either the way they're written, or the themes behind them--than from specific authors. Certainly, Picano's Like People in History was a big influence on me when I was working out how to write my first gay character, as was William S. Burroughs' Queer and, nothing to do with sexuality, also a lot of Ayn Rand and M. R. James. It probably comes back to that quest to put myself completely outside of my own experience. After all, getting inside a man's head is not easy for a woman, even though I do try to remember to wipe my feet first!

M. Griffin: Wow, what an interesting answer. There's so many ways to take this interview! I think I'll avoid asking about the creative dissonance between Ayn Rand and Felice Picano (unless you want to comment) and focus instead on poetry. Your web sites mentions that your work has been featured in mixed media exhibitions. Can you tell us something about that?

M. King: Ah, but isn't dissonance a catalyst for inspiration? LOL I think the trick is that I get such different things out of different authors, different books. Reading Rand, for example, is just coming face to face with this huge, unflinching view of the world that says so much about a certain time and place - and Picano, in his own way, does the same thing, but it's a totally different experience.

The mixed media thing was a while ago now - back in my home county of Kent (South East England). A group of local artists were exhibiting at the County Hall, and asked if I'd do some poetry inspired by the paintings to hang alongside them. It was a fairly informal thing, and at very short notice, but it was great fun playing with the distinctions (or lack of) between how we perceive art and the written word...which almost brings us back to Ayn Rand! I have to say, I don't take my poetry very seriously, but it is something I enjoy.

M. Griffin: Good answers! We both have written novels with gay characters. While I'm writing for a broader audience, I'm pretty sure that the people who purchase my books are predominately gay men. I know that there's a significant market for gay fiction among straight women, such as the yaoi sub-genre of manga. Do you have a sense who buys your books, and do you write with any audience segment in mind?

M. King: Oooh, I'm likely to make myself unpopular here! Readers are advised to have their rotten vegetables ready to throw. *grin*

The point about who buys my books I would love answered. Most of the readers and reviewers I've come across have been female, but certainly not all--and I would adore more contact with my readership. I know they're out there, I just worry that they think I'll bite...which I rarely do unless invited.

However, like you, I'm not really writing with a particular market segment in mind (far too clinical!), and I'd like to think my appeal is reasonably broad. I go with what the idea for a story presents, and that ranges widely. Right now, I have gay, lesbian, straight, and completely genderless fiction available, and I'm currently working on a book that features my first trans characters.

I definitely agree that there's been a sharp upswing of women reading and writing gay fiction. Temporarily side-stepping the whole debate about what is 'gay fiction' and what is 'm/m', and who has the experience to write what in any case--which I find really fascinating--and excluding sub-genres like yaoi, with which I'm frankly not really that familiar, I do see parallels with the blaxploitation flicks of the Seventies.

Once the pelting with pulpy tomatoes is over, I'll explain that. There are many wonderful writers of all genders out there producing great work that offers readers a tremendous amount of choice in (particularly) romantic literature, and that is commendable. I'm not suggesting for a moment that the marketplace is flooded with authors slapping penises on two-dimensional characters and calling their work 'gay', because the Brokeback Mountain movie made it fashionable. In many ways, I think it's a great landmark of equality that GLBT has simply become another sub-category on so many retail shelves, alongside 'interracial' or 'historical'.

But, personally, I'm selfish. I write what I want to. If I could stick to a given remit that said, perhaps, I'm writing gay erotica for women, I would probably have a much better profile. Unfortunately, for me, it's not enough that a character is gay/trans/has three heads and a dog called Rupert. That part of their identity needs to serve a purpose in my story. In Breaking Faith--my first e-published novel, which started me on the road I'm on today--the fact that my protagonist, Tommy, is gay is only as relevant as the fact he's mixed race. They're both (regrettably, but realistically) isolating factors in what is, for him, a very difficult life that ultimately leads to the crime he commits.

The same is true of Safe House, to date one of my best-selling titles. It's short gay bondage erotica, but to me it's much more than that. Writing it was an exploration of how trust, risk, and honesty work between two people, and that dynamic would only have worked the way I wanted between--not just two men--but two men with the particular characteristics that Simon and Frazer have.

My Travellers' Tales series from loveyoudivine--short fantasy fiction inspired by Romany folk tales--is slightly different, in that I actively chose to link the series by giving them all a gay spin, so to speak. Again, it's got a undercurrent of relevance to the subject matter. In several parts of England I've seen Romani friends subjected to appalling discrimination, just the same way that gay friends have been, and indeed I have as a bi female. Orientation is not the only thing that--for no damn reason--makes people outsiders and, in my opinion, that's a social concern that still urgently needs dealing with.

So, no...hauling myself in from this very long rant, I don't write for any single audience. It's probably unlikely that the same readers who've enjoyed titles of mine such as Safe House or Breaking Faith would like, for example, Daemon--a very off-the-wall paranormal mystery novel in which an English grad student is haunted by the chain-smoking ghost of a murdered glam rock star from 1976.

Equally, some have, and have loved that variety in my work. Ultimately, I'm having fun, trying to consistently produce the best work that I can, and I welcome anyone who wants to come along for the ride.

M. Griffin. I'm loving your answers!! Our readers can learn more about the books you mentioned on the following websites: Breaking Faith, Safe House, Travellers' Tales, Daemon.

Can you give us a sense of your methods? Lawrence Block surveyed best-selling authors some time ago and found a wide variance in their approaches. Some authors start with a detailed outline and character portfolios, while others have a more organic approach and let the characters take the lead as the story the develops. How about you?

M. King: That's a good question. It would be wonderful to say I'm incredibly organised and always know what I'm doing, but I think people would just laugh if I tried to pretend!

It very much depends on what I'm writing. If I'm pretty much secure in knowing what I'm talking about before I start, it's usually just a case of pulling up the drawbridge, giving the dogs something to chew, and getting on with it.

But, if research is required, I go into a blind period of absorbing as much as I can about whatever it is I need to know--life in 1920s Paris, Assiniboine culture in Northern Montana, how somebody actually goes about self-administering hormones in a gender transition process, whatever--and then I sit on it for a while and let everything percolate. Once I've done that, I can apply the meat of the story onto its bones, and that is usually an organic process. Everything develops as I go and, more often that not, I end up with a totally different project to the one I started with.

I use music a lot to help me develop flavour. In writing Whistle Bait--a short lesbian romance set in the Fifties [www.flippedfrogcollective.com/whistle-bait]--I overdosed on Carl Perkins and The Collins Kids, and Daemon was probably at least half about expressing my love of seriously vintage glitter rock (think Alice Cooper, Marc Bolan & T. Rex, and Joan Jett). Things like that really build my perception of character, though, and the characters definitely do take the lead.

Sometimes, strange but true, if I've mismatched a character to a trait or physical description--say, describing him as blond when he 'wants' to be dark-haired--the story will stick until I fix it. That has actually happened, and convinced me that, unless I'm clinically insane, writing is predominantly about putting words to things we already know exist in our mind's eye...much like a sculptor who says he can already see the statue in the marble.

M. Griffin: I was only going to ask one more question, but now I've got two. I'll ask them both at once.

I loved your answer about music inspiring characters and scenes and how you insert references into the narrative and plot. Do you ever play music in the background while you write, to help inspire you and set the mood? If so, is there a favorite genre or composer?

My second question is more prosaic. Can you tell us a little bit about your most recent release and where our readers can purchase it?

M. King: Sometimes I do...I must confess Daemon was written almost entirely in 4/4 time, to a backing of my treasured collection of very, very rough Marc Bolan demos and studio out-takes (any readers unfamiliar with the self-proclaimed cosmic superstar who ruled the British charts in the early '70s should go Google him. Really.) plus a whole lot of Nick Drake, Humble Pie, Jimi Hendrix, and The Rolling Stones. I also really love good acoustic blues--largely because I'm a such terrible player--so I listen to a lot of Mississippi John Hurt, Son House, Dave Van Ronk, Cliff Aungier...and far too much more to list!

Of course, if the house is actually quiet, I can be equally happy to work in silence. It's just that I so often forget what that sounds like.

As to recent releases, it's been a very busy year for me. It would be lovely to point people in the direction of my Travellers' Tales series, available from loveyoudivine, with a new story coming out each month. You can find all the releases so far in the series on my author shelf at LYD and my work is also available on Fictionwise, AllRomanceEbooks.com and through my Amazon author page. I'm dotted all over the internet.

For excerpts, free reads, further details on all my titles and sneaky peeks at what I have planned for 2010, you can find me at www.flippedfrogcollective.com, and I also welcome friends on Facebook and Twitter. Thanks for having me--it's been a genuine pleasure, and great fun!

M. Griffin: Thank you! It's been a pleasure.

Read M. King's interview of Alex Morgan at her blog.

Portrait of an Artist Now available

Portrait of An Artist
A Science Fiction Romance
by Max Griffin
Now available from loveyoudivine and Amazon.

Tag Line: The painting was literally like nothing painted on Earth. But can the mystery behind it really save Peter’s relationship?

Blurb: Peter’s an artist, but even his success can’t blot out the physical pain he has to endure. He’s sinking into despair and there’s nothing his lover, Aaron, can do except watch. But then a strange legacy from a distant Uncle on a far-off planet changes everything. As Peter pieces together the mystery behind the painting and the journal, he also uncovers a passionate love story that crosses boundaries, time and space.

Excerpt:

He woke in the middle of the night and unglued reluctant eyelids. Moonlight and shadow greeted him. He struggled to sit up and knocked his cane from its resting place. It clattered against the end table and a photograph tumbled to the floor where its crystal frame shattered into a million glittering pieces.

Aaron's sweet features smiled up at him from the scattered shards. Peter's face was there too, still youthful and surrounded by dreadlocks of chestnut hair. In the photo, Peter stood on two legs that were still strong, and Aaron's arm rested on his shoulder. Their faces shined with joy that hadn't yet met sorrow. He sighed and thought about the gray that now streaked his shoulder-length curls and the pain lines that scoured his face.

Reluctant fingers picked up the photo. His eyes glistened as he thought of Aaron, who, though Peter's age, still enjoyed the vigor of the youth in the photo. Wisps of blond hair floated about his head like a halo, and his broad shoulders and narrow hips sang of an athleticism that Praxiteles would have loved to immortalize. He shuddered as unwanted memories cascaded through his mind and splashed against the lonely shoals of his heart. Aaron's sweaty body above him, their passions merged in an erotic pas de deux. Aaron's merry smile in the morning when they woke together. Aaron's hurt when Peter stalked out of their condo that last time. Peter's own anger and resentment remained buried deep in his core, where it bubbled like magma.

Their separation had torn a hole in Peter's heart. Fuck him. Who needs him, anyway? He held his head in his hands and fought back tears. From the counter in the kitchen, an amber bottle of pills called. He hobbled through the darkness and his fingers quivered as he unscrewed the lid and stuffed a white capsule in his mouth. He sighed and wished it would ease the pain in his soul. He would settle instead for a brief surcease from the misery that plagued his leg.

Muffled harmonics plummeted against his ears from the composer in the adjoining loft. High notes bored through the ducts and the deep bass rumbled in the walls. The middle tones, though, were too feeble to penetrate the soundproofing. A deep ache clenched at his bladder and he groped for his cane.

The painting loomed over him, begging him for affirmation. The colors slithered after him in the faint lunar illumination as he lumbered to the bathroom, harassed by the dull burr from his brace. The forms haunted his mind even as his body expelled the foul-smelling fluid that pained him. He returned to the studio. His still life accused him with shallow abstractions while the dusty painting screamed in anguish. Light. He needed light to see with.

He flipped a switch and winced when the solid state imitation of sunlight flooded the studio. His bones ached and his skin crawled with greasy sweat and crusty paint. The brace gripped at him and its tendrils dug into his nerves like wasps. He grasped his cane and hastened across the studio to where the harsh lights washed across the pastel shades of his painting and transformed it to a sallow pastiche of academic maunderings. But the other painting! Its violent gobs of color compelled his gaze.

His hand trembled as he picked up a brush and stroked dust away. His breath quickened when the arid puddles of oil assumed a new sheen and the shapes they formed twisted at his mind. He leaned close and saw that the varnish was still clear. With a soft, flannel rag and painstaking fingers he removed the grime from the surface, inch by inch. The moon sank below the urban horizon, and the composer next door silenced his synthesizer, but Peter worked on. The sun rose, and birds sang outside his window, but Peter stayed focused on the fraction of the painting's surface underneath his rag.

At last he finished. He stepped back and examined the result. His analytical mind at once saw the clumsy technique. Paint coiled in hopeless blobs, so that the surface rose and fell in chaotic hills and valleys that bore no relation to the overall composition. The shapes twisted from random swirls to crude geometric figures. It was as though Euclid had drawn by manipulating a child's Spirograph using his tongue.

He recalled Cantwell's words in his uncle's basement. The painting was, indeed, hideous. Disappointment huddled in a dismal corner of his soul. Like the pain in his leg, it was a familiar companion.

He tossed his rag aside and yawned. When his gaze fell on the pristine perfection of his just completed still life, a smile tugged at his lips and satisfaction with his mastery of craft swelled in him. He was an artist, not some amateur hack producing crap that tasteless snobs called "folk art."

His glance turned once more on the canvas from Helios. That was when the flowers trapped inside the artist's tangled creation bloomed and filled the room with glory. In that instant, their beauty took his breath away.

He collapsed to his sofa and stared in wonder. Nothing about the painting had changed. It was still an inept clump of colors and contorted shapes. What changed was that Peter looked deeper into the images and saw with the artist's tormented eyes. Bumbling, incompetent, graceless: yes, the painting was all those things. But the painter had found beauty in a bouquet of flowers and had poured his soul onto this canvas, in the anguished hope that others might know the same joy he felt. Peter wept, for the painting's very imperfections amplified the tragic magnificence of its creator's vision.

His eyes roamed over his studio. The carnations that he had painted yesterday still stood in their vase, now wilted from the heat of the morning sun. His still life glowed, like a pure and delicate theorem, filled with form and color and no meaning.

Next to him, on the table, rested the leather notebook Cantwell had delivered yesterday. It creaked when he opened it. An inscription inside, written in an ancient Spenserian hand, read, "This journal is for my brilliant nephew, Peter. Within, I spin the tales of my many journeys off-world in search of beauty and truth. Contrary to the poet's wisdom, I have rarely found these two in the same urn, for often truth is filled with sorrow while beauty brings but frivolous joy. For the diversion of his muse, I commend to him the narratives within."

A faded ribbon marked a page in the journal. Peter opened the book and a tattered photograph fell into his lap. He picked it up with two fingers and peered at a handsome couple standing before a corrugated building. Wind whipped at her long skirts and lifted his blond hair in a golden halo, while auburn braids framed her face. They gazed upon one another with smiles that glowed with the serenity of a Klimt portrait. An endless smudge of carnations covered the ground, as though a fantasy of van Gogh had come to life. What appeared to be a large badger with purple fur nuzzled at the woman's hand. He flipped it over and found the words, "Caitlin, Adam, Sebastian, January, 2359, Spirit Lake, New Iowa, Helios."

Long Musings on Short Stories

I love reading short stories. I've been scared by The Telltale Heart, uplifted by Le Jongleur de Notre Dame, and amused by The Celebrated Jumping Frog of Calavaras County. I read short stories every chance I get. Good and bad, funny and sad, I can't get enough short fiction. It's also my favorite medium when I write. I enjoy being able to produce a complete tale in less than 10,000 words, where I can wrap everything up in a neat little package. The fun of a short story comes from its brevity. That's also what makes it difficult to create. But if it were easy, it wouldn't be nearly as satisfying.

I've read and critiqued so many short stories by beginning authors that I decided to summarize some of my reflections on the craft of short fiction. Every author will find their own voice, and not every lesson I've struggled to learn will apply equally to every story or to every author. In real life, I'm a mathematician. Proving theorems is hard work, too, just like writing, but at least mathematics proceeds from agreed-upon axioms and follows a logical set of rules. Writing is an art, not a science, and doesn't follow rigid, logical rules. There are, however, conventions that authors have learned, by hard experience, over the years. A writer who knows when to break with convention can transform a routine story into a powerful work of art. But you have to know what the conventions are before you decide to break them. Picasso first mastered academic realism before moving to more abstract Symbolist forms. Beginning authors would likewise do well to understand the principles of narrative and style deduced by past masters of the short story.

Short fiction has been around almost since the dawn of history. Everyone has at least heard of ancient myths and fables, even if they have never read Homer, Virgil, or Aesop. Short stories, however, are a fairly recent innovation as a literary form. Starting in the early 19th century, this new genre emerged with innovative works by such authors as Nikolai Gogol, the Brothers Grimm, Washington Irving, and Nathanial Hawthorne. Edgar Allen Poe built a good part of his literary reputation on this new form, and was its most discerning early critic. Starting with his review of Hawthorne's Twice Told Tales, Poe developed a theory of the short story that is still applicable today.

Poe felt that the most important single artistic goal of a short story was to present a unified experience for the reader, either in effect or impression. From this simple premise, he outlined a number of conclusions that can help authors construct effective short fiction. Poe's view of the short story anticipated the modern theory of story-telling, articulated most clearly by John Gardner in his book The Art of Fiction. Gardner explains fiction as a guided dream, in which the author leads the readers through the events -- the author and the reader become partners in creating the fictional universe. In doing this, the author engages the readers as active participants so that they imagine the story along with the author. Things that distract the reader from this dream-like state, things that "take the reader out of the story," are thus counterproductive to the primary artistic goal. If one combines Poe's concept of the short story providing a unified experience with Gardner's notion of fiction as a guided dream, some simple principles emerge.

I should note that it is the author's job to guide the readers in matters that are important to plot, character, theme, and emotional context. The reader is the author's partner in imagining the other endless details of the story, filling in details from their own experience. By showing the details that are important to the story, the author stimulates the readers' imaginations and encourages the fictive dream.
Point of View. The general rule in all fiction is "one scene, one point of view." Hopping from one character's head to another's is one of the quickest ways to take readers out of your story. On the other hand, staying with one point of view throughout a scene deepens the readers' engagement and increases their sense of intimacy and immediacy. In short stories, head-hopping is even worse, since it detracts from the unified effect that should be author's artistic goal. Thus, a short story should almost always use a single character's point-of-view.

Sometimes authors will want to convey the emotional state of more than one character in a scene. It's tempting to write something like the following.

Mary watched as the door swung open and Pete walked in. She smiled and said hello, while she wondered why he looked so worried.

Pete couldn't stand that she smiled at him. "Hello, Mary," he said.

Besides being dreadful writing, this little snippet jumps from Mary's head ("she wondered") to Pete's (he "couldn't stand" that she smiled). Now suppose the whole thing is re-written in Mary's point of view.

Mary turned when the door creaked open. "Pete! It's so nice to see you." A smile tugged her lips upward, but a chill passed through her at the sight of his pale complexion and trembling hands.

He glared at her and snapped, "Hello, Mary. What are you smiling about, anyway?"

Now this is all in Mary's head. She turns in response to the sound of the door creaking. The smile "tugs" at her lips, and a chill passes through her at the outward signs of his tension. Then he glares and snaps at her, both things she can sense, so now the reader infers he's angry. His words show that it's her smile that annoys him. The second example conveys the same information as the first, but does it a dramatic rather than narrated form and stays in Mary's point of view.
Show, don't tell. Of course, this is one of the most fundamental rules of all fiction, but it is even more important in short fiction where economy of style is often crucial. It should go without saying that economy of style sometimes means "more is less." Consider this example.

Mary watched as the door swung open. The man walked in. He was about five-foot-five, wearing blue jeans, a red shirt, and glasses. He had a sad expression on his face.

Besides the fact that these sentences thud along like an out-of-tune engine, they constitute the author stopping to recite a set of facts. This recitation takes the reader out of Mary's head and out of the story. Now consider a second example, with even more facts.

The door creaked open, and Mary whirled as a short man scuttled inside. She wrinkled her nose at the gross beer-belly that hung over his grimy blue jeans and the pizza stains on his red T-shirt. His eyes cowered behind horned-rimmed glasses, where gloom puddled in unshed tears.

This gives the same facts, plus several more, but the second example paints a picture and uses more active verbs. By leading with the sound of the door creaking and having Mary whirl, we remind the reader that this is in her point of view. By listing the details that Mary notices -- the grimy jeans, the puddles of gloom, the pizza stains, and the beer belly -- we learn things about both the observed and the observer beyond just a listing of facts. Subjective words like "gross," "cower," and "gloom" remind the reader that it's Mary who is gathering these impressions, reinforcing the point of view.

Note that it's more intimate if the author describes the sensory information directly, rather than filtering it through Mary. For example, it would weaken the image to say something like, "she felt a cold wind blow through the open door," as opposed to "she shivered when a chill wind gusted through the open door."

I would be remiss if I didn't add one of my most frequent observations about beginning writers: overuse of adverbs. Stephen King tells us that the road to hell is paved with adverbs, and I'm convinced he's correct. Adverbs are often a shorthand in which the author falls into "telling" rather than "showing." I try to use no adverbs, since otherwise I'd sprinkle them all over the place like fairy dust.

Consider the sentence

"What a fool," he said softly.

Now it's true that "said" is pretty tepid, but the way to pep up this verb is not with an adverb. Instead, we might use a more precise verb:

"What a fool," he murmured.

Even better might be a simile or metaphor that paints a picture.

"What a fool." The words puffed from his lips and fled like smoke in the wind, leaving behind but a memory.

The reader is left to infer that the words were "soft." That little step of inference is one way to draw readers into your story.
Make Every Word Count. Chekhov wrote, "One must not put a loaded rifle on the stage if no one is thinking of firing it." Don't put something in a short story unless it serves a purpose. Don't spend pages describing a giant marlin unless the reader needs to know those details to understand the story, the theme, or the old man who's roaming the sea searching for the largest catch of his life.
First and Last Sentences. The first sentence is important in any piece of fiction. In my ideal world, the first sentence names the point-of-view character, places that character in time and space, and has him or her doing something. It's even better if the first sentence portends the conflict that the character has to resolve. The last sentence should provide that resolution, make the reader reflect on what just happened, and reinforce the theme of the story. Combining these tasks with "show, don't tell" can make these two sentences some of the most difficult to write. It's worth the effort. The first sentence is what grabs the readers and thrusts them into your fictional universe. The last sentence is what nails the story into the reader's mind.

Here's an example of a not-so-good opening paragraph.

Derek got in his car and headed for downtown. He wore a tight-fitting pair of leather pants and a white t-shirt that showed off his muscles. The county court building sat on a square piece of land in the middle of the city, surrounded by brick storefronts on all sides.

This is a nice, short, declamatory set of sentences. They name the point of view character, have him doing something, describe him, and orient the reader as to location. But they are also the author intruding to tell the reader a set of facts, and thus are "telling" rather than "showing."

Here's an alternative that is has more imagery and reinforces point of view and character.

Derek followed Old US 30 as it wove its way into the center of the town. He circled Jackson Square looking for a place to park and cursed the congested noontime traffic. When a teenager on a skate board zipped in front of him, Derek hit his brakes and honked. The kid gave him the finger before he disappeared into an alley between two grimy, brick storefronts.

Derek glanced at his destination before he squeezed his beat-up Honda into an empty parking space. He thought that that Stalin would have loved the dreary, concrete courthouse that squatted in the middle of the Square. After he fed the meter, he dodged traffic and pushed his way into the lobby.

A buxom security guard lounged next to the metal detector just inside the door. She shoved a plastic bowl at him. "Please put your wallet and any metal objects here, sir." Her eyes widened a bit as her gaze raked over the muscles that coiled under his crisp, white t-shirt.

He grinned and flexed his pectorals for her while he dug items out of his tight-fitting leather pants. "Can you tell me where the County Recorder's office is at?"

"Third floor, on your left. You can't miss it." She seemed to be undressing him with her eyes as he passed through the gate. "Let me know if you need anything else," she purred, licking her lips.

"I'll do that." He hesitated as he read her name off the badge on her uniform. "Gretchen." He swaggered to the elevator and pushed the up button.

This establishes all the basic elements found in the simpler, declamatory opening. It adds many details to help bring the scene to life, and presents everything from the standpoint of what Derek senses. In addition, the things that Derek notices and that happen in this scene reveal little details about him and his surroundings. This, in turn, can reinforce bits of plot, theme, character, or mood. For example, if Derek gives the skateboarder the finger instead of just honking, we learn something about his state of mind. The fact that he's driving a beat-up Honda instead of a Porsche also conveys information about the character and his situation. His interactions with the guard show that he's a bit of a narcissist and perhaps a tease as well.

On the other hand, if your goal is just to get inside the courthouse where Derek does something, maybe the best approach is to start the scene once he's inside. Maybe all this information about the location of the courthouse and its surroundings is irrelevant to the story and should be just omitted. Sometimes deciding what to not include is as important as deciding what to include.

Just for completeness, let me include one more example. Consider the following opening.

The buzzer woke him up. It was dark, and he couldn't think from the sleeping pill he'd taken after the quarrel. His mouth tasted bad. The buzzer sounded again. It was raining outside.

It starts in media res, but that's about all. We don't know who the "him" is in the first sentence, nor do we know where "he" is at. We don't know who "he" quarreled with. Even worse, the sentences are dry and the images tepid. Here's a better opening that has more complete information, and with more vivid prose.

The buzzer's repeated rasp pulled Peter from a numbed sleep. He sat up, peered into the gloom of his studio, and groaned. The sleeping pill he'd taken after his quarrel with Ivan muffled his thoughts like a giant pillow jammed inside his skull. His tongue was a dead sausage that pressed against his mouth and tasted of stale coffee. Whoever was at the front door pressed the buzzer again and drowned out the gentle susurrations of rain drizzling on the roof.

Of course, I'm not saying the second example is perfect. But it's certainly better, and orients the reader in space and time, and reinforces the point of view. The images are more interesting and the prose more vivid. On the other hand, opening with the character waking up is a bit trite.

Limit the Time Frame. While flashbacks and flash-forwards can be effective tools in longer fiction, they often detract from the unity of short fiction. In addition, the transitions from the present to the past and back again are difficult to manage in a short story and can be confusing to the reader. Time breaks also, by definition, interrupt the flow of the narrative and run a grave risk of taking the reader out of the story. In short fiction this latter risk is even greater. Thus, a short story should almost always be told in a linear fashion.
Narrative technique. We all remember the basics of narrative structure from high school: introduction, complication, rising action, crisis, climax, falling action, resolution. While you don't have to follow these conventional structural elements, they have the advantage of being familiar to readers. In a short story, there is less time to introduce and manage a nonconventional narrative. In "The Philosophy of Composition", Poe argued that a short story should end with the climax, with the resolution folded into the action at the high point of the story. In any case, a short story should almost always follow a conventional narrative structure.
Characters. There's not time in short fiction to have a cast of thousands. A short story should have as few characters as possible. The author must draw the characters with a few distinctive traits and reveal their personalities through their words and deeds.
Purpose and Theme. Not every story has a theme, but every story has a purpose. Note "theme" and "purpose" are not the same thing: the theme is the moral of the story, while the purpose is why the author wrote it. Some stories are just there for fun, some to amuse, some to instruct. As an author, you have to have a clear idea of why you are writing your story and what you want the reader to take away. Don't forget that your story should achieve a unity of effect or impression, so your artistic techniques and your purpose must be congruent.
Focus. The very best short stories almost always have a single point of view, a simple narrative structure, a short time frame, and a single, clear theme. It's tempting to add a sub-plot, or a counterpoint theme, or the quirky second cousin, but if these distract from the unity of effect, don't do it! Instead of a satisfying, unified whole, you will wind up with a hodge-podge. Remember, a short story is not a novel, where you have time to explore characters and themes and plots in great depth. A short story is, above all, short!

Of course, none of the above are absolute rules. The astute reader will, for example, know that A Rose for Emily has a non-linear time-line, or that dozens of adverbs appear in the first ten pages of The Sun Also Rises. It's not that Faulkner and Hemingway didn't know about Poe's theories, or couldn't follow the conventions. They considered what was best for their story, and made a deliberate choice to discard convention. Since this was a self-conscious decision, they could then adjust other aspects of their narrative to still achieve unity and the overall effect of a guided dream.

The grotesque contortions of Guernica are so powerful precisely because Picasso mastered academic realism. This mastery meant that he understood how to distort realism to achieve his desired effect. Similarly, Faulkner and Hemingway produce powerful works of art because they understand narrative, plot and character and can defy convention to startle and inspire rather than confuse and disengage the reader. Except for a few natural geniuses, one acquires that skill by first understanding and mastering the craft of writing.

If I were as skilled as Faulkner or Hemingway, I could break convention and produce great art too, and with the same regularity as they did. But I'm not that talented, so I apply craft to produce the best stories I can. If I choose to break with convention, it is only after considerable thought. Convention exists because it's what usually works best. It shouldn't be a straight jacket, but neither should one discard it without due deliberation.

Beam Me Up, JJ
A review of the new Star Trek movie

I grew up in eastern Iowa, not far from a small town that will be the future birthplace of James Tiberius Kirk. I know where he will be born because the town celebrates his future birthday every year. There's even a museum and statue of their future favorite son. The name of the town, well, village, is Riverside, Iowa.

After its launch in 1967, Star Trek became a unique and powerful phenomena of popular culture. While the networks at first wouldn't listen to the fans and cancelled the original series, something in Gene Roddenberry's vision resonated in the popular culture. It arrived in a world on the brink of nuclear destruction, divided by race, religion, ideology, disease, and poverty. In the face of these challenges, Star Trek offered a vision of the future full of hope and confidence. Somehow humankind would survive and build a new and better society, one which surmounted our present-day problems. That new world honored diversity, and replaced divisions with a federation of intelligent beings all working together for the common good. In the future, technology and a strong moral compass assured that all beings could find a path in which they might live long and prosper.

This vision of hope became the DNA that bound together millions of fans world-wide. Without it, forty consecutive years on TV in six different series and ten feature films would never have happened. Never mind that the plots were often hackneyed, and the characters flat. Never mind wisecracks about William Shatner and stop-action acting. This series was never about art or literature. It was about hope.

But, let's face it, something about the franchise had lost its panache in recent years. We all loved Scott Bakula, but even his considerable talents couldn't rescue the last incarnation on television. To be sure, the writing was better, the special effects dazzled, and the acting was solid. But something had changed. Maybe it was us. Maybe hope no longer mattered. Maybe the Star Trek vision no longer held meaning.

The new Star Trek splashed onto the big screen this last weekend and breathed new life into the series . The director, J.J. Abrams, brings just the right combination of drama, character, humor and, yes, hope to the screen. This movie promises to re-launch the series for a new generation of viewers, in the language of today's problems and today's challenges. At the same time it respects the old and the enormous fan base that's out there.

In the latest Star Trek film, when James T. Kirk departs for the Starfleet Academy, he does so from the Riverside Space Port, in a nod to that little village in Iowa. That was when I knew that the writers and producers of the new Star Trek movie cared about the myriad fans of the old series and would be true, in their own way, to Gene Roddenbery's vision. Never mind that the scenes from Iowa looked like Southern California. Where in Iowa is that enormous gorge that the youthful Kirk drives his Corvette into? Well, nowhere. But it was fun to watch.

The casting director deserves special kudos for selecting actors who are credible as youthful versions of their iconic forebears. Chris Pine looks and acts like we'd think a young Kirk would, all bravado and obsessed with the young ladies. Karl Urban is perfect as the disheveled and laconic McCoy, and Simon Pegg steals every scene he's in as Scotty, delivering zinging one-liners with aplomb. Zoe Saldana is credible as Ohuru, and the rest of the bridge contribute in their own way. But the star of this film is Zachary Quinto as Spock. His performance is perfectly nuanced. He channels the cool and logical Spock that Leonard Nimoy created. But there's the twitch of his lips, or the cock of an eyebrow, or an ironic twist to his tone, that reveals new and unexpected depths. The script shows him as an outsider growing up, the X-Man of this story. As a youth, bullies taunt and beat him for being a half-breed and he yearns to become a perfect Vulcan. When at last he succeeds and gains admission to the Vulcan Science Academy, he turns it down because they insult his dual heritage. Later, it's his passion that leads him astray, but it's Spock's discipline and honesty that bring Kirk to command chair. We see his conflict in his face and in his tone at the penultimate moment. His story is the one that resonates with today's outcasts, just as Nimoy's did for an earlier generation, and Quinto plays it to perfection.

No Trek movie is complete without its villain, and Eric Bana adds a new page to the saga. Just as Ricardo Montalban created a conflicted and believable villain for an older generation, Bana portrays the bad guy in this film with passion and clarity. Like all interesting villains, he's not pure evil. It's the searing loss of family and friends that drives him to the deeds he commits. We understand him, even if we cheer when his ship collapses into oblivion.

The sets and CGI images are faithful to the old versions of Trek, but they have the gritty reality of Star Wars, too. Even the brand-spanking-new Enterprise, on her maiden voyage, doesn't have the plastic perfection of the 1967 craft.

The new Star Trek movie re-launches the series. The old vision is there, along with the creative fires to keep it going through more sequels. There must be joy in Riverside, tonight, as their future favorite son makes hearts throb and continues the mission to boldly go where no one has gone before, or at least not gone recently. Star Trek and its vision of the future are back. That vision never really left us, for it was always in our hearts.

Don't count out the tenacity -- or audacity -- of hope.